Yep you guessed it we went to the zoo. Our favourite animal was the red panda,ok I know what your thinking their so absolutely adorable!
Our second fave animal was the Tasmainien devils they are so, so , ugh I can't explain how cute they are.
Our fave rotation was the eels they are so freeky because they stare at you and they move really really slowly and it just creeps you out.
We liked the meerkat tunnel because it was really dark and you could pop your head out of the tunnel to look at them!
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