It's so CUTE

The cutest animal was the red panda. The red panda was jumping on the tree softly and it was showing of  it was adorable it was going up and down the tree. And it was going in it's house but I think it liked the outside better because it was more fun jumping on the tree then staying in a house.The red panda went all the way to the top and came down then it was jumping on it's house lightly it keeps on going out and in every second.But then it stop's and it just was walking around on the branches. I saw it twice. First I saw it when I entered the zoo but I couldn't see it but then I did it was climbing up to the top.Then I found it again when my group found the meeting place we were just watching the red panda until everyone was there. The red panda didn't do much when I first saw it.And so many people liked the red panda it was a tiny bit full so I couldn't see it then I saw it's tail ling on a branch and it was moving higher and higher on the tree.I think it would have been cooler if there was at lest two red pandas.I never saw the red panda at the bottom on the grass.And i didn't see it eat or drink but I still liked it.The red panda looked like a red raccoon but it's a panda as you can tell by it's name. That's the my favorite animal and that's the story of when I meet the CUTEST animal in the zoo.          


Miss Lister's feedback:

• Interesting vocabulary: softly, adorable, lightly
• Well done sticking to one part of the zoo trip you liked the most

• "Showing of" or "showing off"?
• Re-read and check where you are missing full stops - use them at the end of an idea.  The second sentence is quite long
• Make sure it is "I" rather than "i"