"Yay we are going to the Zoo today!"Our favourite thing we did for our New Zealand rotation was the kiwis because we have never seen one before and we had to find them in the dark room.The female Kiwi has a long Beak and is fat and the male Kiwi is skinner then the female Kiwi and it has a shorter beak.After that we went and saw one of our favourite animals the Meerkats.We liked the Meerkats because of the way they stood and ran from one place to another.We saw about 8 Meerkats.What a wonderful day we had that day.
"Yay we are going to the Zoo today!"Our favourite thing we did for our New zealand rotation was the kiwis because we have never seen one before and we had to find them in the dark room.The Female Kiwi has a long Beak and is fat and the Male Kiwi is skinner then the Female Kiwi and it has a shorter beak.After that we went and saw one of our favourite animals the Meerkats.We liked the Meerkats because of the way they stood and ran from one place to another.We saw about 8 Meerkats.What a wonderful day we had that day.
Miss Lister's feedback:
- Perfect speech marks and punctuation for the first sentence
- Excellent sharing with the facts you learnt on the day
- You have included the main parts that were your highlights so this makes your post an interesting read
- Choose one colour for the writing, otherwise it becomes hard to read
- Re-read and decide which capital letters do not need to be used and which ones you have missed
"Yay we are going to the Zoo today!"Our favourite thing we did for our New Zealand rotation was the kiwis because we have never seen one before and we had to find them in the dark room.The female Kiwi has a long Beak and is fat and the male Kiwi is skinner then the female Kiwi and it has a shorter beak.After that we went and saw one of our favourite animals the Meerkats.We liked the Meerkats because of the way they stood and ran from one place to another.We saw about 8 Meerkats.What a wonderful day we had that day.
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