Sunday, 10 August 2014

Can't Resist The Animals

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Our school Howick Primary went to the Auckland Zoo on Monday the 28th of July. We discovered the zoo and the Red Panda was my favorite animal in the zoo because it is so cute and adorable. They are good tree climbers and they like showing off.  The Red Panda is red, skinny, has a dark tummy and a long tail.

Miss Lister's feedback:
  • Perfect capital letters
  • Loved the interesting vocabulary: discovered, adorable, dark tummy
  • Think of a hook that will capture your audience
  • Expand your ideas by talking about what makes them cute and adorable.  What sort of tree climbing skills did they have?

"So cute so adorable I can't resist the adorableness." I discovered the zoo and the Red Panda was my favorite animal in the zoo.They are cute and adorable because they are small and they look chubby. They are good tree climbers and they like showing off. They jump from branch to branch. The Red Panda is red, skinny, has a dark tummy and a long tail.



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